Tuesday, 27 November 2012

The Eye

One day I was just strolling on the beach, relaxing and cooling down. I had a boring day. I hope I would find something to cheer me up or to give me something to do. So I carried on walking and then I found........

A shell underneath a piece of reddish driftwood. I carried on again. An eye , an eye. What in the world did this come from, a squid or a whale? I don't want to know. Is this weird or what. I went over to the policeman and showed him, he said that it was either a squid eye or a whale eye. I ran home and asked Mum if I could go round the block on my bike, and she said yes. So I ran to the Museum, I lied. I went in the door and gave it to the person at the front desk.

She said what is this and I told her I do not know. So I just left it on the desk and ran home, phew just in time for dinner. The next day Mum and Dad read the Museum weekly and saw the eye and said well I wonder who found that.


  1. Wow Samuel. That is an amazing piece. I love the first paragraph it is a really good way to start the story. Well done. What is your favorite paragraph?

  2. Well done Sam,
    I like how you put I wonder who found that?
    Keep up the good work.

  3. Great work! Samuel.
    your paragraphs were great. I like your second paragraph.
    Well Done.

  4. Awesome Sam

    I like your post it is so cool. It is a very interesting post. I like how you didn't tell your parents that you found it.
    Keep up the GREAT WORK!

    Courtney :)

  5. I agree with all the comments, above.

    This is a very special piece of writing which really engages the reader. Well done, Samuel!