Tuesday 24 July 2012

My origins story- A story of a lone robot.

It was another lonely day,

I went for a walk in the woods, horrible smoke was blazing in the air. I suddenly saw a train go by 15km per hour, the fifth carriage had a logo like mine. It looked like I would find a friend or two, so I pounced on the sixth carriage. It zoomed all the way down a metal road it was so long so I went to sleep. I reached this weird factory it looked abandoned,but not for long,I walked some more a huge gate flung open without a push as if some ghost had opened it. Big forklifts screeched and pounded into sheds, with big shipping containers. They almost ran over me with their big wheels!
I stepped on a leaf from the forest, I thought and went back into the forest.




6 comments:

  1. Amazing description Sam I love how you express
    your feelings and describe the black smoke.

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  2. awesome Samuel I love the part when you said horrible smoke

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  3. This is excellent writing Sam we also watched this video and wrote about it.

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  4. I agree with the other boys, Sam!

    I really like the way you use strong verbs to describe what is happening. Bravo!

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  5. I agree that you wrote the story in your own words very well!
    Even though the video was short, it was still cool, especially when you wrote it!

    Sincerely, Teva Tait.

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  6. Hannah (Sam's Aunty)18 August 2012 at 17:54

    Sam, I really liked the words you used in this story! It makes it interesting, like there is a lot of action happening and it is easy to imagine! Very cool. I hope you keep writing more stories. From your best Aunty Hannah

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