Wednesday 16 May 2012

My Autumn poem

Autumn leaves
4/5/12
When the wind blows like a parachute catching all the air

The sun would glimmer  behind the trees like glitter.

The leaves blow low down as pieces blow off the leaf into the cold autumn air and gets in people's eyes.

The temperature cools down and the trees rustle.
Winter comes the trees are bare,
No leaves.




WALT: observe and include specific details in our writing
SUCCESS CRITERIA

SELF ASSESSMENT
Includes four nouns (from observation)`:)
Made the nouns do something:l
Started each new description on a new line:)
Extended each line so it makes more sense
(may include a who, where, why, what, when).
:l

2 comments:

  1. What a cool poem - you have used some really interesting words: glimmer, glitter, rustle and a simile at the beginning of your poem. Keep up the great work Sam O.

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  2. Hannah (Sam's Aunty)18 August 2012 at 18:29

    Wonderful! I loved this poem! You have a way with choosing words Sam. From Aunty

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